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DeAd_cOmMaNdO · 07-09-2007

hey good job on that! i enjoyed it very much.

it would make a great opener to a longer piece, wher ethe main character (our fugitive) wakes up later on...

if this is your first piece of 'seriuos' writing, i strongly urge you to keep it up. my only complaint would be knowing when to break off and start a new paragraph, to help things flow better, but other than that, great work!

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DeAd_cOmMaNdO Conscript Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 5 Rep Power: 0 Thanks: 88 Thanked 62 Times in 69 Posts Blog Entries: 5	hey good job on that! i enjoyed it very much. it would make a great opener to a longer piece, wher ethe main character (our fugitive) wakes up later on... if this is your first piece of 'seriuos' writing, i strongly urge you to keep it up. my only complaint would be knowing when to break off and start a new paragraph, to help things flow better, but other than that, great work! Last edited by DeAd_cOmMaNdO; 07-09-2007 at 10:24 AM.