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Originally Posted by DeAd_cOmMaNdO  hey good job on that! i enjoyed it very much.
it would make a great opener to a longer piece, wher ethe main character (our fugitive) wakes up later on...
if this is your first piece of 'seriuos' writing, i strongly urge you to keep it up. my only complaint would be knowing when to break off and start a new paragraph, to help things flow better, but other than that, great work! |
well, it will be the opening to something more, well spotted. i have a whole plot waiting in the wings, i just threw this up to get myself motivated. and i never did know when to paragraph properly.