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Originally Posted by Inquisitor Rosenadel  The part about the Marine commanding a strike cruiser is cool. The line about him witnessing all these things and then doing worse is also a little chilling. I like all the similies and metaphorical descriptions, too.
By the way, it's "berth", not "birth". Normally I'm not one to point out mistakes if corrections are not asked for, but this one is a little glaring/confusing. Sorry! |
Not at all! i meant to ask for C&C, if I didn't, i'm a buffoon! Please, even the smallest thing, suggest away. This is one I will sink a LOT of work into, so I want it to go well!