[Dan296]

very cool!
couple things though:
"Let loose the howl from countenance with rage fouled,"
his rage isnt fouled, its....never ending? should be UNfouled IMO

''And spill the hot blood of your enemies, whether friend or foe''

you have a double entendre right there. you say enemies, then wether friend or foe. you alread established that 'they' are enemeis. maybe replace it with 'And spill the hot blood on the ground, whether friend or foe'

otherwise, very cool.