518th part 3A

[The 518th]

"what the frag was that!!!", Colonel Faust was as surprised as the ogryns when he saw the bone heads and the commissar thrown in the air by what seemed to be an artillery shell, but to Faust's trained ear it wasn't like any ork shell he's ever heard…or any imperial shell for that matter. The ogryns never even made it to the chimeras, and the shells seemed to hit with pinpoint accuracy, it just didn't seem right, "get me captain hill….NOW!".

Faust heard footsteps and turned to see commissar Seth stalking towards a squad of "chem.-dogs", bolt pistol in hand. Before Faust could speak Seth was blasting all of them in the head yelling something about thieves, cowards, and other junk Faust didn't get. Hearing this skeptical more people came out to see, but by now Seth was finished with his Execution and was now firing indescrimitably into the crowd. "Seth! What the frag are you doing??? You just can't go out killing all the penal legionnaires like that! What's the matter with you??". Out of ammunition Seth turned around to face Faust, then had a data slate held firmly out in front of him. Faust picked it up and scanned through is contents, apparently they were missing a companies worth of rebreathers, an alarming amount of morphia, a pretty hefty amount of the regiments rationed liquor and smoke sticks, a few bolt pistols, 5 chain swords, and a heavy sniper, but nothing to alarming. "this is nothing to beyond a court marshal, so why the indiscriminate killing?", Seth merely pointed to his chest were his family brooch was…..or used to be, it suddenly struck Faust like a 10 ton grox, not only had the chem.-dogs got into the supply tent but they had also stolen Seth's family brooch and by the looks of it his power sword which was of such good quality a space marine terminator would be proud to carry it, "o…frag…." Before Seth could move his hand for his reload Faust was on top of him, bionic arm pinning Seth's right hand to the ground, while Faust attempted to subdue the enraged commissar, but being a commissar Seth was extensively trained in hand to hand combat as well as swordsmanship and managed to punch Faust in the jaw with his free hand and then head butt the colonel making him reel backwards, taking advantage of the vulnerability Seth reversed the pin on Faust but Faust bionic arm gave him the strength to throw the commissars bulk over him into a pile of auto cannon drums. Faust had never seen his long time friend like this before, blinded by fury…just like an ork, before Faust could fully recover Seth had his back up chain sword n his hands thumbing the activation rune, now Seth was a master of hand to hand combat, but Faust had few rivals when it came to swordsmanship not only that but his power sword could cut though the chain sword like butter, it was not the first time they had gotten into a heated "argument" but this was the first time Seth had actually pulled a weapon on Faust. "Commissar Seth! As a commissar in the imperial guard I would have expected better of you! You embarrass the emperor this day as you have let rage blind you like one of the xeno we fight to overcome!" Faust knew what to say to Seth, it wasn't the first time he had or chose to talk his way out of a situation. As if someone had pressed a deactivation rune the commissar seemed to not know of the damage he had just caused and he seemed to just take in the pieces of skull and brain matter everywhere were his bolt pistol hit the chem.-dogs in the head. "i…im….." Seth started to sob "I don't know what's come over me Josef…I don't deserve ot wear the pins of the commissar…I don't deserve to live…. colonel Faust, I have found myself wanting and suggest summary execution as an example!"

Faust turned off his power sword "o come now Seth, we will have non of that. How about a drink and tell me what happened?"

Hill arrived a few minutes after event and looked around, "aww, hill…something has been bothering me since I got here…" Faust said from behind. "What exactly is your mission here?". There was a silence then hill finally said "vermillion level Faust. that's all I will give you…"

"hill…if were going to work together I would like to know what the frag im supposed to do that was so important I had to postpone replacing the 15 hundred troops and 364 vehicles ive lost in the past year…" said Faust with an irritated tone.

Hill merely shrugged, " we all take casualties", now Faust was pissed.

"Listen here you son of an ork! Unlike you my boys aren't expendable! Theres a reason for us being called the 518th ELITE armored division! Its hard to travel Armageddon looing for replacements!". Hill finally gave in and proceeded to tell them the mission.

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Brother sergeant savius looked up groggy, ork sedatives wearing off. He took the room in at a glance, there were 25 other battle brother wit him all strapped to some kind of slab of rock, he was sure there was 5 others with him….

Just then the pain boss walked in and noticed the woken marine, the painboss merely smiled and pulled out a "serynge" and stabbed savius in the neck, "o no it is not your turn yet marine boy…."

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"what…the ….frag….you have got to be fragging me…this has to be the biggest pile of grox **** I've ever heard! You mean to tell me they pulled 2 regiments to deal with what? A thousand boyz? To save a group of space marines? What have those bastards ever done for us? They would have left us out to die like they did on ukrana 2!" faust was furious, he had little respect for space marines after events on the ice world ukrana 2 long before he got command of the 518th……

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"sir!!! The orkz have broken through the 3rd line! Its only a matter of tme before they make it to the citadel!"

the vox operator hadn't told major faust anything new, knew damned well the orkz were breaking through, but he had to hold so reinforcements arrived.

"tell fire teams d-h to pull back to this location! And give the other retreating elements covering fire!" faust indicated an area on the map. "were the frag are those reinforcements!"

"sir! General Molotov says he has just been intercepted by a large mob of flash gitz and trucker boyz! He will be detained for the next few hours!"

"frag it all!" yelled faust, "Faust!" Faust's superior general ditric stepped through the door with a data slate in his hand.

"if we get our of this alive remind me to give you command of a regiment…but we need to make a counter attack to cut of the swarm of boyz! Why aren't we attacking??"

"with all due respect sir, im trying to regroup whats left of our forces, after the frag head that gave the wrong coordinates for the bombardment got us instead, its been downhill form there, were down to 50% strength and counting. And were doing all we can to keep them from the czar, much less a counter attack!"

"sirs! Theres a space marine strike cruiser in orbit! Should I ask for assistance???"

"Faust you looke to our defence! I got this!" Faust was only half listening

"space marine strike cruiser! This is general ditric of the steel legion 38th! We request immediate support! We are being over run and need any support available!"

…at first no answer, then there was a scoff on the line "we have much more important things to do than constantly help you guardsmen every time you find yourself in a jam, you're the emperors soldiers figure something else out, now we need to kill the warboss"

"listen here you frag head! All we need is a squad! And we can make due! You don't need a fragging whole chapter to kill a boss! Hell ive done It with a platoon!" faust had never seen his commander so upset.

"a lowly guardsmen should not speak to a black templar that way, we appreciate your efforts to detour the orkz so we can get to the boss but we don't have the manpower to assist you, you all shall be remembered for your sacrifice" then the signal went…

"Faust! We need to hold for Molotov! Can you do that???" there was anguish in ditrics voice.

"sir yes sir!…what about the marines? Aren't they going to help?"

"no Josef…they have a more important mission"…the general never used Faust's first name….

"don't just stand there you frag heads! Get moving! Get c company to the citadel wall! I want fire support! Were falling back to the citadel!" Faust was worried..the general almost never acted this way, but he had to put that aside to assume his duties.

*several hours later*
38th! This is Molotov! We have defeated the last of the orks! You can come out now! We have to rescue some downed marines! There strike cruiser was brought down by a space hulk and the marines are defending the wreckage but are vastly outnumbered 100 to 1!"

" I like those odds!" smiled faust, "alright load up! Were heading out!"

"we will meet up with the ukrana 8th, 5th heavy infantry, and 13th mechanized!" Molotov reminded.

[Inquisitor Rosenadel]

Ok, this needs some work, aside from the editing, which if left undone, makes this very hard to critique anyway. First off, Hill has not been acting suspiciously as far as I can tell, so Faust asking what his "real mission" is come out of no where. Did Faust know there was a mission, or was he supposed to have picked up on Hill acting strange? Also, if Hill is part of the Imperial Guard, unless he is a Colonel, he would merely be given orders by his superiors, and would not know about this mission.

Which brings me to the mission: the Imperial Guard would not be sent to rescue the Black Templars unless they were vitally important. The Black Templars would under take any rescue themselves. And for 25 Black Templars to be captured would be verging on the impossible, I think. perhaps one or two, but Black Templars would not give up, and to wound them enough to incapacitate them would probably kill them because their enhanced physiology would enable them to handle anything else.

The communication between the Black Templars cruiser was odd, as well. First off, the Black Templars would not insult the Imperial Guard. They might be thinking that thay are inferior, but Space Marines were human themselves once, and they respect the Emperor's fighting forces. Second, the General would not call ANY Marine a "frag head" becuase he knows that the Marines are the Emperor's own warriors, bred from the gene-seeds of the Primarchs, the best warriors the Imperium has to offer. Space Marines are held in awe, and even a Lord General would show them respect.

I would suggest reading "Warriors of Ultramar" by Graham McNiell for more insight on how Space Marines and Guard/PDF forces get along, and how each views the other, how Space Marines speak (vocabulary and tone), etc. It can be purchased through the Black Library if there is no official GW store near you.

[The 518th]

finaly an actual critic....
well ill adjsut my story accordingly.

in partialy my defence i kind of rushed on this because i had other things to do.

part 4 explains most of what happened.

i only picked templars cause i had jsut finished reading about them in "conquest of armageddon"...i needed some space marine antaganist.

[The 518th]

yes i've read the ultramarines omnibus.

there are some chapters that hold themselfes higher...ill prolly end up making one up