Preiview: The true colour of thunder

[Captain Slow]

Okay folks, if you happened to read my older piece of fluff, 'Whatever you do, dont look up' i knida left the end fairly open, and Anuds and his men in serious trouble. so ive decided to finish the story. it dosent seem right to just leave it all open like that, its just makes me feel...akward. unsetteled. anyways, heres the first little snippet from todays wokrings, enjoy! and oh yeah, and critisim, any problem you have with it, astheticly or fluff wise, feel free to pick me up on them, in fact i want you to. anyway.

Preview: The True Colour Of Thunder.

Planet fall +…I really don’t know anymore.

Things have moved so quickly these last few months…. Has it really been that long?
We survived the bunker attack, emperor only knows how, but I guess it’s in part; thanks to our new allies. Space Marines. We have been sent Space Marines. Of all the things in the galaxy, Space Marines. Yet… I am troubled. There are only 10 of them, 10. Against the hordes that I, myself have seen now roaming this emperor forsaken waste. I really don’t know why were here anymore.
Me and The survivors of the bunker attack on PF+191, we’ve been tagging along with the marines ever since. It had been a hard slog, an uphill battle all the way. The marines that have been with Octavius and his command squad and us.
Jokers gone. So is Light-hammer. They were killed on PF+191, however I’d like to say the enemy paid in kind but…somehow I don’t think these things we’ve been fighting feel pain.
Octavius has mentioned to me several things about this god-forsaken rock, first of all being that the situation was, as I’d feared. Now, I’m no lord commander, but I know when something’s gone awry. Octavius has told me that the war was going as planned, until traitor marines turned up, and threw our western most flank into dismay, so Octavius and his squad have been dispatched, and somehow along the way he’s picked up us, although something tells me we’ve signed up for a suicide mission by going along with them. I just hope Octavius is right about this. I just he’s right, because otherwise. None of us are going to get of this planet alive.

Personal Log:
Lieutenant A Pliskin

Please Note that All Logos have been extracted from a data slate found on a unknown planet in the Arx system, during the aftermath of an incursion into the Segmentum obscurus Arx Gap by the Chaos Warlord “Typhus”
The author of the logo, a Lieutenant A Pliskin, is mentioned in several after actions reports, alongside a squad of Imperial fists space marines. No other reference other than this remains. It is therefore our conclusion, that like many during that time in the Arx gap, he was killed, however is simply not listed as KIA. Current mintorium records show him as MIA. The only discrepancy is with his squad and the temporarily attached commissar, they, are all listed as KIA as well as the commissar that was attached to Albadinian 53rd during the Arx Gap campaign. It is our final conclusion that all squad members perished including the Lieutenant, during the Final assault on the heretic stronghold, the city of arcantine.

Yours Faithfully, Savant Arthus
Under the direct command of Inquisitor Dactarine.

[Petey1016]

hmm a few missing words on "I just he’s right, because otherwise. None of us are going to get of this planet alive." it should read "I just hope he's right, because otherwise. None of us are going to get off this planet alive."

Other than that i reckon this conclusion will be pretty good.